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You do not use a mirror to reflect the inner being
Character cannot be found by what the eye is seeing
Make-up and expensive things might mask surface flaws
But can't cover the mistakes behind superficial walls

You mustn't hear the others if they discuss all you lack
Opinions are lonely thoughts not understandable fact
Words and actions are alike, acting without conscience
Listen to the inner voice not retaliating nonsense

You cannot pick your family but you decide on your friends
People bring their influence whichever messages it sends
They either choose to cut you down or try to help you grow
But you allow manipulation with what they let you know

You should not judge your value by the talents you receive
Defining someone by their gift will forwardly deceive
Society doesn't separate those who can from who can't
Failure in particular gifts makes none insignificant

You shouldn't dwell on affection that you might obtain
Human beings show various ways of great love or disdain
Emotions are in such secrecy which people do not boast
Instead of  being unsure of feelings love yourself foremost
I'm aware that the timing is TERRIBLE. I've focused energy into the moral approach of a suffering self esteem rather than energy into the structure.

1st paragraph (appearance): Spending unnecessary time & effort on looks doesn't actually improve the way we feel about ourselves, but changes the way we feel about our looks.

2nd (criticism): when listening to negative criticism, we eventually begin to agree with it, accepting it as guidance. People shouldn't let opinions lead their lives.

3rd paragraph (influences): society won't stop bad role models from bombarding our lives, but we can decide what we allow to influence us.

4th (abilities): we cannot judge our self value by the things that we can or cannot do; considering we cannot give what we do not have.

Lastly: We can't always rely on everybody, so we need to love ourselves foremost.
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King-of-Earth Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow, i realy liked this.
RomulusCrohns Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008
A very good, very perceptive poem. I admire your rhyming skills, too.
that is really good
CarriedMyCross Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2008
Thanks for the favourite. It's thoroughly appreciated.
kittykittyhunter Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2008   Writer
Well, I loved it darling. I found it gripping. And I must say, it's good to see you back! :glomp:
CarriedMyCross Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2008
I'd submit work just to hear your lovely comments. Thank you :slow:
kittykittyhunter Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2008   Writer
Aaaaw... well, you'd better keep submitting then love!
all-my-life-i-dream Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2008  Hobbyist
i like the depth you have created in this poem and most of us can see clearly that this is all to true:hug: good job
CarriedMyCross Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2008
I'm so glad you said that. I love that everyone is mentioning " we can see clearly" or "we all relate to this".
all-my-life-i-dream Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2008  Hobbyist
its a good thing that you know people are relating to your poem it says a lot in other words that you are very talented:hug:
Lacelette Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2008
I love this poem. Really I do. But the first time I read it, the rhythm was kinda off. Then I read your artist's comment and I tried reading your poem again. It sounded nicer in my head, although, still, the rhythm wasn't so perfect.

But what I love most about this poem is the usage of words. I love how you used the words here to describe a scene and feeling. Lovely. I like what this poem represent. I used to have a very low-self esteem. So I think I know how its like. A motivational camp helped change my life. ^^

Haha, and I also like the fact that this poem relates to us all somehow. Good to hear from you again. Wonderful poem btw. Hope to see even better ones from you soon. :clap:
QueenOfLeeGaa Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2008
lovely theme. watch some of your syllables, the timing's close, but not perfect
CarriedMyCross Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2008
I totally agree; the timing is quite terrible. But instead of using my effort and energy to construct the structure of my poem; I've focused on the wording in a little more depth than usual.
I edited my artist comment again, and mentioned that each lines serves a different purpose in a pattern of every paragraph. Those that have the time will realise what I'm trying to explain.
Shadow-Chaos-7 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2008
its very good and its all true
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